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Curled up around yourself, you form a globe
that's perfect, though it's not a perfect sphere:
a world in microcosm, I suppose,
a sleeping metaphor, trembling its fear.
The lighthouse beam sweeps out across the waves;
departs, leaving the dark. You too were gone
when next I looked; as silence fell, we gazed
upon the Moon as it obscured the sun.
The sea grinds rocks to sand and sinks away;
the shadows cast by clouds will wax and wane;
the seasons turn from green to gold to grey;
all flowers fade like ripples tracing rain.
These fragments blaze like flares, like dancing flame
never to be repeated; all the same.

hahahahahaha terrible trite sonnets to get me used to the form you do not want to know how many times I had to rewrite this so that it managed to actually contain quatrains INSTEAD OF ENDLESS ENJAMBEMENT

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Date: 2015-02-09 03:41 pm (UTC)
alexseanchai: Katsuki Yuuri wearing a blue jacket and his glasses and holding a poodle, in front of the asexual pride flag with a rainbow heart inset. (Default)
From: [personal profile] alexseanchai
Sounds like a plan. (Though to be honest I was definitely thinking of the poem as a whole as the 'it' referent, not just the first half.)

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Date: 2015-02-09 07:54 pm (UTC)
davidgillon: A pair of crutches, hanging from coat hooks, reflected in a mirror (Default)
From: [personal profile] davidgillon
I don't know about obvious, but the first quatrain certainly spoke to me more. In fact I found myself wanting to edit it into a different form (guess I'm not a sonnet fan).

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