[poem] Gosling

[kaberett]

My place in the order of things
is, or so it sometimes seems,
at the back of the second sock drawer
with the dust and dead insects and dressmaker's pins:
an awkward spiky half-forgotten oddment.

Comments

[vass]

I like this. And I like awkward, spiky, half-forgotten things.

[kaberett]

<3 :-)

[sylvaine]

This is lovely.

[kaberett]

Thank you!

[quirkytizzy]

Your ability to work imagery is FANTASTIC. "second sock drawer" "dust and dead insects." Really specific words there. Very concrete. Very sharp. I love that!

[kaberett]

<3 Thank you so much!

[sebastienne]

... <3

I find your last line.. Beautiful. As in, something that would draw me to a person.

[kaberett]

Hah. <3

[raze]

And you are an oddment I am very pleased to know :)

Super effective imagery here, really nicely done.

[kaberett]

<3 Thanks - appreciated. x

[silveradept]

Sometimes it feels like the second sock drawer is a promotion, so this is a poem to which I relate.

[kaberett]

Yeah. Unfortunately in this instance it was an unwelcome and surprising demotion, so :-(

I'm sorry that it strikes so close to home, and glad the words are useful.

[inoru_no_hoshi]

I relate to this SO MUCH. The imagery is so sharply evocative that the feeling behind it really sits in the foreground. I like that.

Still, you are a lovely oddment I'm glad I know! ♥

[kaberett]

<3 I am glad I know you too, and I am sorry it chimes but glad it is useful.

[fyreharper]

Oh hey! I am not the only person whose socks do not fit into one drawer, then! ;p Although in my case they are currently divided into Everyday Socks, and Drawer Of Nifty Things which also includes some socks and many other things. And, well. I think you qualify as Nifty <3

(I am sorry that that is not the way things divided out for you; demotions are hard :offers hugs: )

[kaberett]

I'd have coped better if it weren't apparently unintentional demotion via thoughtlessness! But am Taking Some Steps in addition to the sulkpoetry, so ;)

(In fact my socks do currently all fit in one drawer but they have occasionally been separated out in the past, heh.)

[fyreharper]

I hope Steps turn out well! :)

(It might be time for me to weed out some of the less-beloved socks. Mostly because there are some new ones I've been eyeing on sockdreams, and I have a giftcert for there, and right now there just isn't space... >.> )

[hairyears]

This flows better as spoken word:

Like a spiky half-forgotten oddment.

[kaberett]

The word "awkward" being conspicuously what you have removed from the line, heh ;)

(But thank you!)

[cadenzamuse]

Ouch. But one of those ouches that I'll copy down in my poetry book, because yes.

[kaberett]

... <3

[ex_we935]

This is actually sort of brilliant. (And, er, massively relatable.)

~K.

[kaberett]

Hah. Thank you, & I am sorry, respectively; though also a certain wry gladness that I have found words that work for you.

[calissa]

Simultaneously lovely and lonely. Other people's carelessness can be so discouraging sometimes.

[kaberett]

Quite -- and thank you.