[a scribble]

[kaberett]

[content note: breathing, difficulty with, etc.]

In the spaces
                  between breaths
between heartbeats
             I am trapped
within the cage of my ribs, and
choked by the swelling spiking echoes of
my heart. In all this emptiness
it is poetry
            that reminds me how to breathe.

Comments

[kaberett]

Thank you for asking, and I will try to remember for future. ♥ (It is... not entirely metaphorical. But that's just all the more reason to cut it.)

[liv]

Thank you for responding so graciously; I really do feel a bit of a jerk for that comment. And I'm sympathetic in a different way reading this as only partly metaphorical.

[kaberett]

Actually, the lesson for me here is that if before posting something I stop and think "hmm, should I maybe cut this?", the answer is always yes. You are not at all jerkish - thank you for taking care of yourself, and for letting me know how to take better care of you.

[birke]

That is a good lesson!