[pome] subject

[kaberett]

the principal word-echo has been rattling around my head for a few days now; this is very much a first draft and I'm unlikely to ever redraft it without impetus, so I - I think input is welcome? If you have any. <3

SUBJECT:
of the sentence
of my life
I subjected myself to you,
was your subject
(loyal - and otherwise)
until the revolution.
Throw off the chains, you are no object
ran the rousing battle-cry
and so here
here am I
once more
the subject

Comments

[mfb]

I really, really like and appreciate your poetry and the poetry you've hooked me up with in the past. ♥ Thank you.

The repetition of 'here' really carries a lot of weight, at least to me. It almost seems ... snarky, in its own way?