[poem] Collecting Dreams
Sep. 26th, 2014 01:32 am![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
kaberettWrite your dreams upon me.
Carve them bone-deep, filigree
and fretwork of my flesh:
I'll bear your weight. I'll bear
the wait. Here, hear
as my heart beats. For all that's wrong,
for all I cannot do, this,
at least, is steady, sure.
You're not the first. I am a beast
of burden. I am strong.
Beloved, if you'd only dare to ask
you'll find me more than able for this task.
Carve them bone-deep, filigree
and fretwork of my flesh:
I'll bear your weight. I'll bear
the wait. Here, hear
as my heart beats. For all that's wrong,
for all I cannot do, this,
at least, is steady, sure.
You're not the first. I am a beast
of burden. I am strong.
Beloved, if you'd only dare to ask
you'll find me more than able for this task.
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Date: 2014-09-26 12:33 am (UTC)I think it's a collision of:
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recessional using the phrase "written in bone"
- my Feelings about my status as an organ donor
- reminding myself of my own strength
- the-self-as-monster
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Date: 2014-09-26 03:06 am (UTC)Have you asked your circle what love looks like to them? What does it feel like?
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Date: 2014-09-26 10:25 am (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 2014-09-26 02:19 pm (UTC)I have reread the poem with this line in at least three different stresses, and it changes every time. <3
I like the contrast between filigree and fretwork and the able draft beast.
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Date: 2014-09-26 03:14 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 2014-09-26 06:16 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 2014-09-26 06:23 pm (UTC)"Carve them bone-deep, filigree
and fretwork my flesh:"
- keep it all as verb vs mixed verb and noun.
It's a fascinating one to read for what it says, not solely for how it says it (which is probably how I too often read poetry).
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Date: 2014-09-27 01:33 am (UTC)