[poem] Sonnet III: To make the dawn

[kaberett]

-- two ways to break a world.
The first: an end by force; to grind to dust
and scatter to the heedless brilliant stars.
The second: love, and warmth, and gentleness.
This time an egg: the smooth horizon's curve
that shelters and thereby defines your dreams
will unchecked choke: a softer, smaller death.
Instead: take heart and hope; so startling bare
your fresh-cut teeth, and stretch across the shards
of every fear that held you small and close.
Bewildered, daring, raise your face anew
to unimagined unexpected skies.
If this is breaking -- oh, then let me break
and, having broken, break, and break again.

Comments

[redsixwing]

Oh. My. WORD. *applause*

[kaberett]

Thank you!

(I am pondering writing the accompanying notes about all the associations/imagery I've tried to shovel into this, but I feel like that might be a little too pseudy...)

[redsixwing]

Oooh. :D
I'd be interested in seeing it. I'm terrible at reading poetry and usually miss at least half the stuff in it, so.

[alexseanchai]

*clappyhands*

[kaberett]

Thank you!

[davidgillon]

Applause! It's been a while, so glad to see you posting poetry again.

[kaberett]

It was really lovely to sit down and write the first draft of this and realise only after the fact that it was 14 lines and in most cases 10 syllables to a line (and to then decide to knock it into sonnet form and have that work). Even better, the next set of imagery has already suggested itself, so something else will probably be coming along shortly...

[sfred]

Oh, that is lovely.
*meep*
<3

[kaberett]

Thank you <333

(It arises from me being incoherently and inarticulately soppy late one night, and groping at the distinction between what it means when I describe "the world having broken" in the context of PTSD for counselling, everything being terrifying and incomprehensible and wrong, versus what it means when I tell someone I love that they break the world and thereby make it seem bigger and more marvellous. As much as anything else it was a good exercise in working out what the fuck I meant!)

[sfred]

*nodnod*

[maramcreates]

I enjoyed reading this :)
Thanks for sharing it with us!

[kaberett]

Thank you very much for saying, and you're very welcome!

[serene]

Oh, my. Lovely.

[kaberett]

Thank you!

[untonuggan]

...

how...

this...

no more words, just rereading and savoring the taste

though also

[untonuggan]

do you mind if I add this to a follow friday post? if you don't want me to direct extra traffic here because of spoons/whatever, that is totally fine. just wanted to check first :)

Re: though also

[kaberett]

By all means do :-)

[kaberett]

Muses, isn't it.

Which is to say: I am profoundly grateful that I get to love people who show me this.

[dhampyresa]

This is very beautiful. (Here through the follow friday link.)

[alexseanchai]

I am picturing a dragon egg just-hatched. :)